Saturday, October 3, 2009

Carcass of a Soul


Battered, beaten and bruised.
Beneath a baggage of a thick skin,
under the closet of rotten flesh
lies the carcass of a lost soul in this lost city.

From the jostling crowd, trying to find a footing in the local train,
to the slippery floors of the busy corridors of the corporate park.
Seems like a race,
a race among the carcasses to reach the top.
A race to be lonely or a race which leaves you lonely.

The city never sleeps, neither does it let the carcasses sleep.
For, its hard to sleep with your eyes open
Hard to dream with unfulfilled dreams in your eyes.
The clock ticks, the time bomb about to explode.
The race still on,
The winner still a mystery.

Carcasses all around, not a soul.
All carcasses of a lost soul,
A thinking machine of flesh and bone,
Just like the ‘think - pad’ you see in the ads.

Lost and delirious I stand,
Just like the carcasses, I see - Without the soul.
On ‘them’, I comment
‘Them’, I criticise,
‘Them’, confuses me.
But sooner than later I realise,
I am also running the race,
with no purpose or aim.
for me also, its hard to sleep,
as the eyes just don’t close.
I am also one of them.

I am a carcass without a Soul.

Faisal Ahmed Ikram

11 comments:

Anonymous said...

Excellent …you have mention all things..Nothing to say… its painful journey of a man

Unknown said...

what a painful poetic flow ... very few dare to show the dark underbelly of the city, that's praised left, right and centre .... for its "spirit" ... u have brought out the "carcasses" ... good!

Anonymous said...

Well written, but above your age. You are a go-getter dosent suit you....Go Have A Life! Bindaas Rehne Ka....Every Morning Is A New Day...Cheers

crookedlines said...

Existentialists we all are.

Anonymous said...

why are you doing this...I'm sorry but I'm a bit hurt by this poem...May be because i have met the people who have been coming to work for twenty years together in the same train sitting on the same seat and never complaining about it...or the corporate lads and lasses who take make way for an old blind man trying to walk through the crowded station...every city has an underbelly...but this city has the will to survive... "jo bhi ho jaye hum toh jee kar dikhayenge..." :) sorry again but that how i feel...

Dhwani........ said...

the use of the word carcass is interesting andat is versitle, that adds to the flavour of the narration. also the use of methaphors has been careful and realistic imagery has been evoked.
painfully real
good work

mohsin said...

well written...and you know what...

mohsin said...

i can see the pain in your ink.

Pearl said...

I am BORED~~~~~~!!!!

saransh said...

Like the third and the fifth stanzas...it's got a flow..

thefemaleme said...

carcasses!?